Breathless
The storm bellowed on the other side of the glass. It was as if Mother Nature was on my side, her angst and anger lashing out on the world, as my body betrayed me. Screams vibrated against the walls until my throat seared.
“We cannot find a heartbeat…” The doctors earlier words replayed in my head as I lay mangled in the delivery room. My husband cried out. I hissed. I hated them all for the commotion down below.
The screaming continued, but it was no longer my own.
Faulty machines, they said.
My baby sighed, full of life.
The July 15, 2015 prompt over at Carrot Ranch Communications: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a breathless moment. Write about life.
Till next time,
~AJP
Oh my gosh!!!!
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Is that a good gosh…?
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Whoa. Stunned speechless.
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Thanks lol
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Oh! Geez, lady. This is powerful. Absolutely beautiful. Well done 99 word flash! (I’m totally counting…) 😉
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Thanks! I struggled with this one.
Hahaha did you?! I cheat, I use the word counter on Word when I write.
I’m fixing to go read yours now!
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Whaaa? How is that cheating? That’s how I count mine.
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That was incredible!!!!
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Thank you, I’m still kicking myself over the typo that you just found. The MALL?! Omgosh.
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Did a fab job of writing the scene as if it were a storm blowing through the delivery room. The tension is well-paced and the last line is like the wind calming down.
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Thank you Charli.
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Wow! I am so happy the way this turned around!
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Me too! I wasn’t sure at first!
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